Noi Sabal’s Latest Script “ManDate” Needs a Rework After 2016 Election Results! Come Out to Help

On Monday, November 14th Noi will ask the HSSW reviewers to not only examine her screenplay based on the usual criteria, she’ll need help with an entire re-think.

She explains, “A few nights ago [November 8th]  a year+ of my work was rendered irrelevant: California and Nevada voted to legalize recreational marijuana use — the two states that my screenplay ManDate hinges its entire “pot-is-illegal” plot on. When I set out to write this, I considered this potential outcome, but it’d been going back and forth out there for SO long I really didn’t think it would be an issue for a while – at least another four years… and probably more. But they did it. So now I have to figure out how to “fix” the script and make it relevant and salable again (without unweaving the whole pot story line or simply “cheating” by putting a date Super at the Open to back time it to when it was illegal…). So if readers could keep that in mind, I’ll greatly appreciate any ideas. I’ll postpone my Harakiri until after the meeting. Thanks so much!”

THE CURRENT LOGLINE:

A tightly-wound CEO gets roped into going on a couples vacation with his wife and her sister but a blizzard hits, trapping him in a remote cabin with his future brother-in-law, a scruffy, laid-back pot dispensary owner he’s never met.

NoiSabalGreenABOUT NOI:

After living and working on both sides of the country (Los Angeles, San Francisco and Orlando) on TV, commercials and films, Noi and her little family (husband, 12-year-old son, two cats and, now, a new 13-week-old Aussie puppy!) moved to Massachusetts to be closer to her husbands family. Now a freelance motion graphic designer and video editor (for companies all over the place), Noi spends every spare moment writing screenplays.

 

 

WHAT ELSE NOI HOPES TO GET OUT OF REVIEW:

“Since I had my last review in Feb, I retooled the first act, cutting it down by more than seven pages (which hopefully helps better identify the theme & it’s placement, the inciting incident and act break). I also cut and rewrote quite a bit from the rest of it (down to 100 pages from 124). So for this review, in addition to the usual critique, I’m very interested to know if the story still flows or if it seems to be missing things, especially in the set up. “

 

Please come to this important review at 66 Winthrop Street, Cambridge, MA, just outside of Harvard Square.  7:00 – 9:00 PM with optional drinks and snacks at the Russell Tavern immediately thereafter. $15.00 dues.

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